Angielski... porażkowy list który trzeba poprawić ;///

tak jak w temacie.. mam list ktory na 100% trzeba poprawić bo nie znam angielksiego i pisze tak jak mi się napisze... wiec zaczynam :

Dear Sandra
I've got a problem. I'm realy concerned about my friend Ichigo.
He's playing games upon phone for hours on end. He's doing it everywhere- at school, at home even when we're in disco. Whole money which he has he buy a new game. He's forgeting about his friend . He isn't cleaning his room and he's failing of task. He lifes in virtual word. He stoped lern. Only games... Other then that he doesn't want to talk about the problem becouse he doesn't see it. When I'm talking to him He's roaring to me and he's speaking that isn't my business. We are friends.. I don't understand why he say this way....
I don't know what to do... His parents doesn't care him... Please help me!

ej tylko nie śmiejcie się za głośno z tych wypocin ;]
Pozdrawiam tych którzy tego chcą

really

wydaje mi się, że lepiej będzie wyglądało He forgets about his friends

He doesn't clean his room

He lives in virtual world

He stopped learning

a dalej nie chcce mi sie sprawdzać
nie ręczę, że to jest w 100% dobrze poprawione

no w sumie to nawet ładniej brzmi

dzięki

i pamiętaj, że list na maturze musi miec min. 108 słów ;>
także lepiej pisać I have zamiast I've, He is zamiast He's.

in school


For whole money which he has , he buys new games .


Jej wersja byla do przyjecia tylko ze friends


because


that's not my business


napisz why he acts this way


His parents don't care about him

To by było tyle + to co napisala Gejszalicious :)

wg mnie powinno byc: he spends all his money on new games.


other than than


mysle ze powinno byc roaring at me

no to chyba juz wszystko ;]